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诗歌的拓扑结构
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以下是我在另一网站与几个网络诗人交流后总结自己的观点而成，发表在其他网站上，现在重登于此。
诗歌的拓扑结构
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首先我不是诗人，也没有研究过诗的理论，但读了一些人的诗之后，我提出一个疑问，为什么那些看似巧妙的词汇组合读起来味同嚼蜡呢？诗的目的，是要trigger emotional response,。我们读不同的诗，反应不同，比如说读老毛的诗词，那是豪气干云，读李清照的诗词，心有戚戚。
我对那些蜡味诗的观察表明，其基本结构是一维的，顶多在某些地方出现LOOP结构（LOOP当然也是一维的），不仅一维，而且单向。
为什么这样的诗读起来乏味呢？我认为原因是一维的单向运动非常的PREDICTABLE，也就是说读了第一句，基本能知道下一句。这跟中国的很多电影、文学作品是一样的，没有任何出人意料的地方。也就无法TRIGGER读者、观众产生足够的心理反应。
所以我提出诗歌的拓扑结构的课题，希望抛砖引玉。
有首歌名叫做："That don't impress me much." （http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/That_Don't_Impress_Me_Much )
我觉得THAT DON'T IMPRESS ME一句很妙。作者显然也是灵感一发、即兴写下。有一位“路过”网友说之所以好因为 DON'T只有一个音节(doesn't有两个）。到底妙在哪里？
我 觉得它妙就在于让听者开始WONDER。首先，that后面接don't,是quite unexpected的用法。从拓扑结构上，这是一个点对多条线的发散，甚至使人联想到-嚓-是一个面。而且，这也暗示，后面还有不impress me的其它东西。但听者听到don't必然引发大脑中一个subroutine进行compute, 而同时又得继续听下面的内容。先是A don't impress me, 然后是 B don't impress me...
当然作者写的时候根本不会想这么多，这就是灵感。就是不通过思维直接找到答案。这种能力，并非人人都有。科学的发现也是如此，几乎所有的科学发现都是灵感：也就是先知道答案，然后才是求证。某种意义上说，这就是ART。
发表评论 评论 (6 个评论)
- 回复 岳东晓
- 这个似乎解释得更简洁：
RidgeWalker: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Anacoluthon
http://rhetoric.byu.edu/figures/a/~anacoluthon.htm
Anacoluthon can be either a grammatical fault or a stylistic virtue, depending on its use. In either case, it is an interruption or a verbal lack of symmetry.
- 回复 RidgeWalker
- Right. I was looking for that definition but fell in the trap named wikipedia.
岳东晓: 这个似乎解释得更简洁：
http://rhetoric.byu.edu/figures/a/~anacoluthon.htm
Anacoluthon can be either a grammatical fault or a stylistic virtue, depen ...
- 回复 raiseluck
- 以理科思维来诠释文学，很有创意！
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=mqFLXayD6e8
That Don't Impress Me Much
I've known a few guys who thought they were pretty smart
But you've got being right down to an art
You think you're a genius-you drive me up the wall
You're a regular original, a know-it-all
Oh-oo-oh, you think you're special
Oh-oo-oh, you think you're something else
Okay, so you're a rocket scientist
That don't impress me much
So you got the brain but have you got the touch
Don't get me wrong, yeah I think you're alright
But that won't keep me warm in the middle of the night
That don't impress me much
我认识一些自认为很聪明的男孩子们
你认为你是天才，你能把我按在墙上（接吻或**）吗？
你是独一无二的，是什么都懂的
嗯，你认为你是特别的或是其它的什么吗？
好，就算你是一个火箭科学家吧，那也不能给我留下印象
你很有头脑但是你有打动过我吗？
别误解我，我认为你很不错，但是那不能使我在夜里感到温暖
那打动不了我
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I never knew a guy who carried a mirror in his pocket
And a comb up his sleeve-just in case
And all that extra hold gel in your hair oughtta lock it
'Cause Heaven forbid it should fall outta place
Oh-oo-oh, you think you're special
Oh-oo-oh, you think you're something else
Okay, so you're Brad Pitt
That don't impress me much
So you got the looks but have you got the touch
Don't get me wrong, yeah I think you're alright
But that won't keep me warm in the middle of the night
That don't impress me much
我从来都不认识一个口袋里揣镜子的男孩，并且随时都准备着一把梳子
你的头发上的发胶几乎都要把你的头发“锁住”了
嗯，你认为你是特别的或是其它的什么吗？
好，就算你是布拉德·皮特，那也不能给我留下印象
你有着漂亮的外表，但是你有打动过我吗
别误解我，我认为你很不错，但是那不能使我在夜里感到温暖
那打动不了我
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You're one of those guys who likes to shine his machine
You make me take off my shoes before you let me get in
I can't believe you kiss your car good night
C'mon baby tell me-you must be jokin', right!
Oh-oo-oh, you think you're special
Oh-oo-oh, you think you're something else
Okay, so you've got a car
That don't impress me much
So you got the moves but have you got the touch
Don't get me wrong, yeah I think you're alright
But that won't keep me warm in the middle of the night
你是那爱炫耀自己的车的人，你很爱干净，在我进门前必须令我脱掉鞋
我简直不能相信你每晚对你的爱车吻别
嗯，你认为你是特别的或是其它的什么吗？
好，你的确是有辆好车，那也不能给我留下印象
你有着“私车”但是你有打动过我吗
别误解我，我认为你很不错，但是那不能使我在夜里感到温暖
那打动不了我
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That don't impress me much
You think you're cool but have you got the touch
Don't get me wrong, yeah I think you're alright
But that won't keep me warm on the long, cold, lonely night
That don't impress me much
Okay, so what do you think you're Elvis or something...
Whatever
That don't impress me
你很酷但是却不能打动我
那并不能使我在一个漫长的、冰冷的、孤寂的夜里感到温暖
好，就算你是“猫王”或者是其它什么牛人
也打动不了我
